It's Not My Fault!

CromaDiBrera wrote:

For me, the biggest flaw is that the melody suggests V chords where there are none (that is, with the left hand remaining on the tonic chord).

Composing is a lot of fun, but I would at least tackle the first few chapters of Piston (among the most agile and less academic texts) which would allow you to have much more fun.

I don't want to be mean (but rather constructive and encouraging): taste or musicality aside, there are (major) fundamental deficiencies that would be a shame not to fill.

Anyway, if you study piano, sooner or later you will have to do some harmonic and formal analysis...

I really appreciate the interest of experts like you in this little "thing" of mine. I will try to follow the advice that almost everyone is kindly providing me, it's just that I feel a bit lost, because I have been studying alone for 1 and a half years and I still haven't tackled certain types of topics, and for this reason, I often don't fully understand the messages you are sending me. But please continue, so with all these inputs I will begin to swim a little in this sea of things being suggested to me. Also, the time I can dedicate to studying is not much (someone might think, but then what do you want from us?), but I love the piano very much and everything I can learn will be a treasure to me. Thank you again to you and to all the other friends who dedicate some of their time to me.

Bye.

Ludovica wrote:

There is work to be done, but melodic fragments combined like this leave something... it would be a shame not to delve a little deeper into composition.

Thank you Ludovica for the advice, I still need to "grow" a bit more regarding composition. If you have the patience to read the reply to CromadiBrera's message, you will understand why. I am not responding directly so as not to repeat myself and bore others; please do not interpret this as a lack of regard for you. On the contrary, I thank you very much for your attention and I hope we will have other opportunities to exchange opinions on music study.

Ciao.

Same for me, thinking back not so much to the melody as to the chords you used, chromatic phrasing came to mind,

certedly it can be improved, it needs to be taken up again and worked on.